For the people who interested in the story I handed a friend of mine the story with how I wanted it to go. His story name is: Mushoku Tensei 『Failure of Reincarnation』
He rewrote my story and made everything the people said my story were bad at, from grammar, clarity, less information more emotion, etc.
If you are interested feel free to help him.
And again sorry for being disappointment for the fans who were waiting for my chapters.. and now this story is officially closed.