Mia Cole's best day turned into her worst in five minutes flat.
She got into her dream university. Then she caught her boyfriend, Jake, in bed with another girl.
Heartbroken and furious, Mia did something wild. She walked into a bar, locked eyes with the most dangerously handsome man she had ever seen, and let one electric night erase all her pain.
She never got his name. She never planned to see him again.
But when Mia walks into her very first college class, her heart stops cold. Standing at the front of the room, in a sharp suit with those same dark, unforgettable eyes, is him, Professor Ethan Cross. Her new literature professor. The man she slept with the night before.
Now they are stuck in the same room, three days a week, pretending that night never happened. But the more Ethan tries to push her away, the harder Mia falls. And the more Mia grows into her own power, the harder Ethan fights to keep his walls up.
One wrong move and they both lose everything. But the heart does not care about rules.

I know the exact time because I am sitting at my desk pretending to read the assigned chapter when my phone lights up and I see the university domain and my stomach does something I am going to pretend did not happen.


Further to our meeting your instinct in paragraph three was exactly right, but you abandoned it too quickly. You made the correct identification and then retreated before following it to its conclusion. The argument you were building wanted to go somewhere. You stopped it at the door.


For paragraph three: the comparison you draw between the narrator's silence and complicity works, but only if you're willing to commit to the darker implication that silence is never neutral. You gestured at this. You didn't say it. Say it.


For paragraph six: cut the last two sentences. They explain the point you already made. Trust the reader.


Chapter 14 - "What the Book Is Really About"