There are some comments on my AO3 and Webnovel that I found really interesting. Some of them are also related to this fic's story, so I decided to put them into this special chapter for you to read as well. I will also include my replies to those comments here.
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Comment from Athanacya on Webnovel:
Jack is not a name that lends much prestige to a house with such a high standard. ;u;
My answer:
That's true. But I'm too lazy to change his name. I mean this is an 'old' idea, and I'm already too comfortable plus get used to it. Bear with me T_T
Plus you might already knew about the full reason on my recent notes as well.
Another comment:
Secondly, it's more in line with what I read. The personalities of most parents in stories I read with "pure-blood" protagonists are at most mild, tending towards coldness and stoicism. Something so "warm" is different. But well, these are just my opinions, not criticisms
My Answer:
I understand where you are coming from. Pureblood families in Harry Potter tend to align more with aristocratic Western noble portrayals rather than ordinary households. That is why a family like the Weasleys feels somewhat unique in the story.
In my version, I want to show that this kind of family dynamic is actually quite common. Some families may be stricter, of course, but warmth and closeness are not exclusive to the Weasleys.
Portraying the Keiths, the Evans, and other families as warm also strengthens the emotional impact of the story. Moments like the first bath accident carry more weight because of that foundation. The tension and raw emotion work better when the family genuinely cares for each other. Without that sense of closeness, it would be much harder to create the same depth of feeling.
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Comment from Akisu on Webnovel:
From the previous chapter -> " In Keith Manor, Nimue woke from a deep sleep. She sat upright in her crib, her white hair disordered and her green eyes wide and unfocused. For a long, silent moment, she didn't move. Then she began to cry—a sharp, broken sound of grief that brought Tilly rushing from his post outside the door." <- So how is she suddenly tucked against her mother's side? This is why you shouldn't use AI. =S
And reply from AbsoluteAverage:
Honestly, it's not even about the AI itself(though, that also sucks), it's more about the author's disregard for their own work. Hard to care about a story when its creator doesn't.
My reply for Akisu:
That's because her mother didn't put her back on the crib. I mean did you 'dare' and 'bear' to put back the child outside your reach after they suddenly cry like that?
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Let me rephrase it. In the previous chapter, Morwenna was sleeping in her crib in the nursery. But after she cried so heartbreakingly, do you really think Jane could bear to leave her alone there? Would it not be more natural for her to bring Morwenna back to her room with Jack, so she can feel safer with both of her parents nearby?
I also never wrote that Jane put her back into the crib. So I think it makes perfect sense if, in the next chapter, Morwenna's sleeping place shifts from her nursery to her parents' bedroom.
For AbsoluteAverage:
I don't quite understand which part of the story, or maybe something about me as the author, gave you the impression that I disregard my own work.
I introduced the great grandmother in the first chapter as a "funny side character" who is always sleeping, but in the latest chapter she is revealed to be the previous matriarch of the Evans family.
I also planted foreshadowing about her frost magic across multiple chapters, along with the line "There was no reason to expect any complication" as a final flag before the accident happened.
If I were disregarding my own story, I would not have planned those elements so deliberately. Or were you perhaps referring to a different author?
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Comment from Arc4203 on AO3:
i don't understand how they're unable to find harry potter, if they've tracked down lily evans. can't they just go a talk to petunia? once they have him, they can just take him to the evans family in france.
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I keep coming back to the same thought: the Evans family has not tried hard enough to find Harry, even after being blocked by the Ministry. I understand that the wards around Harry are related to the Fidelius, which would prevent them from magically locating him. However, the Dursleys are a Muggle family—they haven't been isolated from the rest of the world.
Jane is clearly familiar enough with the Muggle world to dig up all those records. Why couldn't they hire a Muggle private investigator to track down Petunia Evans? Or hire an attorney to make contact and confirm Harry's well-being? Given what we know about Petunia and Vernon, if they had the chance to get rid of the boy and pass him off to other relatives, they would almost certainly do so.
Even setting the Muggle world aside, after discovering that Sirius was sentenced without a trial, couldn't they try reaching out to the Black family? As far as I know, Lord Black is still alive.
Alternatively, there are the Flamels. They have a strong relationship with Dumbledore, but they're also part of the Le Fay family. They would have a vested interest in a scion of their line effectively being hidden away by elements of the British Ministry and Dumbledore. If they chose to, I'm sure they could bring significant pressure to bear on him.
Lastly, the Keith family, they are supposedly formidable enough that even Voldemort did not want to cross them. If they came forward and made a complaint to the Wizengamot would they really be so easily brushed aside?
My Answer:
I see that you have some doubts and opinions about my choices. I will try to answer based on what I have in mind and how I want the story to progress.
Before that, I should repeat something important. The main storyline in my head is still only a rough sketch. On a smaller scale, I usually only have a slightly more detailed outline for one or two chapters ahead. Sometimes I don't even have that. So please forgive me if I can't give very detailed answers.
First, about the question: "Why could they not hire a Muggle private investigator to track down Petunia Evans?"
It is true that the Dursleys are not completely isolated from the world. However, in my setting, the Fidelius and the other protections Dumbledore placed around Harry are extremely complicated. It is not that Jane doesn't want to search for him. The problem is that she can't, and at that moment nobody from the magical world can.
The protections are designed to prevent witches, wizards, or anyone connected to the magical world from accessing any information about Harry. If a Muggle mentions Harry's location or anything related to him, someone from the magical side might hear the words but cannot truly process or understand them. In my mind, it works like censorship, almost like the information is replaced with something like "[Redacted]."
Even if they somehow reach the Dursleys' house, for example by hiring a Muggle investigator to drive them there, they still can't retain the information. They would not be able to remember the location afterward. In that moment, it is as if they can't truly see or recognize it. The protection extends to the Dursley family as well, making the system almost foolproof. That is also why I have not mentioned Petunia's name directly in the story so far. The characters themselves can't say or process it.
We should also remember that Jane spent two weeks searching for information about Lily. The first week she communicated with her family through letters, asking about the British branch. The second week she spent searching in the mundane world. That first week was crucial. Dumbledore likely needed at least a week to set up all the protections properly. If Jane had searched for Harry during that first week, she might have found him. Unfortunately, she contacted her family first before taking further action.
She could not have imagined that Dumbledore would do something like this. She had only been in Britain for three years. That was enough time to know some things, but not enough to fully understand the situation. She didn't even know there was another Evans branch in Britain before Lily's death.
During the second week, when she searched for more information about Lily, I only wrote that she discovered the family connection, that Lily was an Evans, but without mentioning Petunia's name or the exact address. By that point, Dumbledore's protections had already taken effect. They might blur her memory or make certain details impossible to focus on, such as Lily's sister or her mundane family. The exact mechanics are still somewhat flexible because, as I said earlier, the outline is still rough.
For the question about reaching out to the Black family, I will be honest. I didn't really think deeply about that aspect. In this case, I simply followed the canon events. Some parts of the story follow canon closely, while others diverge from it. When I follow canon, sometimes I create my own explanation for it, and sometimes I do not. This is one of the cases where I did not.
Regarding the Flamels and the idea of bringing significant pressure, that could theoretically work, but it carries risks.
First, there is Nicolas Flamel himself and his relationship with Dumbledore. In my interpretation, Dumbledore is an extremely stubborn man. He deeply believes that his actions are correct and justified by the "greater good." His sense of righteousness runs very deep, and it is difficult for anyone to change his mind. He always believes that what he does is the right choice. I reached that conclusion based on his history with his own family and other events in canon.
His relationship with Nicolas is good, but Nicolas probably cannot force him to change his decision. Especially now that Dumbledore has already taken action. Undoing it would be extremely difficult. At this point, we also do not know how many layers of protection he has created around Harry.
As for applying pressure from outside, that could easily create political tension between Britain and France. Harry, in a sense, is considered a national hero in Britain. The Ministry would not react well to being pressured by a foreign party over him. Internal disagreements are one thing. External pressure is another matter entirely, and it could escalate the conflict.
Finally, regarding the Keith family. It is true that they could theoretically bring a complaint to the Wizengamot. However, what result would that produce? Could they even secure a formal hearing? I doubt it would be that simple.
The Keith family is powerful, especially in terms of military strength and deep historical background, but they still have limited allies. Wizarding politics in Britain are also extremely murky at the moment.
Even though the Dark Lord is gone, many of his supporters are still present and hiding within society. The Ministry itself contains many different factions. As I mentioned earlier, many people believe Harry Potter should remain disconnected from the wizarding world. Because of that, pushing the issue becomes very difficult. Escalating the situation into something like open conflict over a single issue would be far too extreme.
I will give a small spoiler related to this.
First, even if Morwenna regains her past life memories when she is five, she still cannot do anything about Harry for the same reasons. Eventually, she will meet him when they are seven. That moment happens because of her third magical maturity, or rather *their* third magical maturity, combined with help from Elara and Vivi. Blood, contracts, wards, and enchantments all play a role in creating a small opening within the protections Dumbledore established. The details of that are still a secret for now.
Second, regarding Petunia. In my version of the story, she is not simply a jealous older sister. She is much more human than the usual "jealous or evil" portrayal. We do not actually know everything that happened during the years Harry lived with the Dursleys. I want to use that gap to build my own narrative. Petunia is still an Evans, after all. In this story, she and her family will not receive a redemption arc, mainly because they are not meant to be villains. In this interpretation, they are also victims of the situation.
That is about as much as I can explain for now. Thanks for the thoughtful questions.
Still from Arc4203 on AO3:
i enjoy the slow burn but you might consider picking up the pace and plot development just a little bit.
My answer:
Thank you for the feedback. I am not sure if I can speed up the pacing much more, though. I think the reason it may feel slow is because the setting so far has stayed in the same place, and the activities around Morwenna have been fairly simple and somewhat repetitive (I mean, what can you expect? She's only 2.)
To be honest, I only recently realized this myself. That's why, in the latest event, I decided to change her routine and let her start exploring more parts of the manor.
When she reaches her third year, her range of activities will naturally become wider compared to when she was two. During this period, the story will begin introducing the wider world beyond the manor. It will also start touching on the extended family, such as cousins, which means Harry will be mentioned as well.
During that year, Saoirse will begin traveling again. She has already stayed at home for a full year, so it is time for her to go out again. The family will also start introducing Morwenna to the non magical world, essentially preparing her for the idea that next year they will travel together with Saoirse in that world.
So the activities in her third year will be somewhat different from the previous year. It will also be shorter overall, since it mainly serves as an introduction and preparation for year four.
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I will give you a rough idea, or some spoilers, for year four and beyond.
In year four, Morwenna will travel in the non magical world, split between England and France. While she is in France, she will meet Fleur, so Fleur will know her original appearance.
As for how they first meet, I'm still not completely sure. I'm considering two options:
The first is a simple, natural meeting, like how children make new friends in a new place.
The second is more impactful. Morwenna has a strong appreciation for beauty, so their first meeting would immediately establish Fleur as someone very beautiful in her eyes. And Fleur, in turn, would be completely charmed by Morwenna's cuteness.
Either way, their first impression of each other will be good, and their bond will remain strong. Especially when Morwenna turns five and regains her memories.
Please let me know which option you would like to see, or which one you find more interesting: the first or the second??
In year five, during her second bath ritual, things become much more intense. It is far more painful than the first, and she almost dies. That shock is what triggers the awakening of her past life memories. After that, there will be visible changes to her hair and eye color, similar to what is shown on the cover.
Following that, the Keith family will hold a debut event, something like a formal ball, to introduce Morwenna to the wizarding world as Nimue Keith. During this event, she will meet Draco, Daphne, and other pureblood children.
Also in year five, she will begin more serious magical education, mainly focused on theory. She will also receive a toy wand.
Year six will be similar to year five, so it will not be very long.
In year seven, she reaches her final magical maturity and undergoes her third bath ritual. It is still very painful, but more bearable than the second one.
That will mark the end of Volume One, "Before the Stone." After that, the story moves into Volume Two, "The Secret Years," which takes place after that ritual and continues up to the time they receive their Hogwarts letters.
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See you later~