{ On the mountain of Berthenia }
Dameion: "C'mon, c'mon! We'll be heading out in 10 minutes. Get ready quickly!" (He shouts to the gathered soldiers.)
( All the Captains for this mission are inside the Talokas. )
{ Talokas: A war vehicle powered by trapping the life energy of several Stone-Humans into a highly advanced machine to make it durable and efficient. }
( The Captains are planning the mission. )
Mischief: "Listen! Right now, we are on duty as Captains! We can't afford to make silly mistakes like joking or making fun of each other. That's what Erza is saying, guys! Erza! Stop acting like you're the leader here!" (She teases him and fakes happy tears.)
Erza: "Shut up! I was just being responsible for my duty!"
Mouse: "What? As a healer?!"
Mischief: (She hits his head with her bare knuckles.) "Shut your damn mouth! You are so mean!"
Mouse: (Grabs his head in fake pain to make everyone laugh.) "Me?! ME?! YOU started it!"
Mischief: "Wanna taste my punch again?!"
Mouse: "Ugh! You just make fun of me every time!"
Mischief: "Me?! I keep you in check, mister! And don't forget who was the one to ask you into her group for the first time!"
Mouse: "Who?"
Mischief: "ME, DUMBASS!!" (Kicks him.)
Samuel: (From outside the door.) "U-um... sir, do you need help?"
Mouse: "N-nah! I am fine!"
Erza: "Yeah, it didn't hurt him, because there's nothing to get hurt down there anyway."
Mischief: (Punches Erza's head too.) "Now shut your asses up!"
Sofi: "U-um... Erza! I wanted to give this to you."
Erza: "Huh? What?"
Sofi: "Actually, we all had a party tonight for today's mission. Mischief and Sushi made a plan and asked Dameion to leave all of us at Sushi's place. But... I don't know why, but he didn't leave you with us."
Mischief: "Uh... we thought it'd be a personal choice or something, so we didn't disturb you."
Mouse: (Still in pain.) "Y-yeah, but I even begged them to ask you to come! They just didn't want to hear me!"
Mischief: (Kicks him again.) "Stop making us the villains, idiot! You never said that!"
Sofi: (Ignores their bickering.) "U-um... Erza! So, since you couldn't come to the party, I picked a little bit of everything. Every food and game, too. Samuel?!"
Samuel: "Yes, Miss!" (He drags in a huge bag of different games from the previous night.)
Sofi: "So while we are free, we'll play here!"
Erza: "Y-you did this for me?" (His eyes well up.)
Mischief: (Lifts him up by his neck.) "C'mon! If you're gonna cry over this, then how will you be ready for a fight?!"
Erza: (Suddenly acts tough.) "W-who's crying?! And it doesn't matter; I'm not in the vanguard, remember? I'm going to help with healing, Samuel, and some strength-based tasks!"
Mischief: "Strength-based? Don't you think we are stronger than you, little healer?"
Erza: (He grabs her wrist hard enough to loosen her grip.) "Don't underestimate me!"
Mischief: (Shocked.) "O-oh! You are quite stronger than I imagined! I am the strongest in bare strength in history, but you are still slightly stronger than me! How did you do that?!"
Mouse: "Because he's a man!"
Mischief: "Shut up! You were lying on the ground a minute ago, 'MAN'!"
Sofi: "Um... Mischief, Mouse! We should celebrate our first mission with Erza. We don't have an eternity!"
Mouse: "Then where is Sushi? If you don't bring her, you'll have to have another party in the middle of the mission because of her."
Mischief: (Looks outside the door. Sushi is busy training the soldiers.) "Hm... Sushi!"
Sushi: (Gets embarrassed hearing her nickname in public. She panics and yells so nobody else hears.) "C-Captain Sumi! Yeah! What is it, Captain Mischief?!"
Mischief: "C'mon, Sofi is giving a party again!!"
Sushi: "Ugh! Sorry, I still have to train these guys. We are going to head out in 5-10 minutes; we don't have much time left!"
Mischief: (Disappointed.) "Ugh... you are being boring again! Okay then, as you wish."
Sushi: "Huff... at least she didn't say anything to embarrass me again!"
Mischief: (Yells before hiding back in the room.) "AND LISTEN ALL OF YOU! HER NAME IS SUSHI! YEAH, THE JAPANESE ONE!!"
Sushi: (Freezes in shock.) "SHUT UP!!!" (She looks at all the troop members.)
( All the soldiers quickly look away at the sky. )
Sushi: (Angry and furious.) "Where were we? Does anyone have any doubts?!"
Soldier: "U-um... Captain, can you explain it again?"
( Back inside the room )
Erza: (After eating the meal.) "Hmm... that was fabulous!"
Sofi: "Yeah? Thanks!"
Erza: "And Mischief... I was thinking, why is Sushi so different from the others? She doesn't look like she's from our continent. I couldn't ask her because she'd probably be offended."
Mischief: (Beating Mouse up again.) "Hm? Oh..."
Mouse: "Get off me!!"
Mischief: "That's because she came here to live. She was originally from a different continent named Japan. When she first came here, she was mocked because of her appearance... so she hated it. She would have killed me if I wasn't her friend when I shouted her nickname in public just now! But that's what I like, so I brought her into my group too!"
Mouse: "She is living! She did it because she wanted to make fun of her herself!"
Mischief: (Wraps the curtains around his neck.) "Stop making me the evil one here!!"
( Dameion's voice booms from outside. Samuel asks the Captains to step out. )
Dameion: "Everyone, listen! We are now ready to step into Sector 3 of Berthenia! Captain Mischief and Sushi will be on the front line! I have already given the chosen soldiers the power they are capable of handling. The second line will be led by Captain Mouse and Sofi. The third line—the support line—will be for healing and assistance! ALL OF YOU STAND TALL! FACE DEATH! FOR THE GIFT OF LIFE AND THE GIFT OF DEATH!!!"
Mischief: (Burps.) "And the gift of friends!"
Erza: (Whispers to Sofi.) "Was it important to feed her?!"
Sofi: "B-but she said she was hungry and hadn't eaten anything all morning!"
Mouse: "Because she ate too much at the party last night! When she woke up, she was still filled with meat!"
( Dameion ignores Mischief's behavior. )
Dameion: "All members, get on the Talokas! We are heading to Sector 3!"
Mischief: "Huff... I am saved!"
Final Verdict: This version keeps your original style but makes it much smoother to read. It's ready to publish!
Are you planning to make Sector 3 a total "blood bath," or will the comedy continue even during the mission?